Baking Talents
I thought I'd give a sonnet a try. I'm not amazing with iambic pentameter yet, but I'm decent (the weird spacing is me trying to get 10 syllables per line). As always, constructive criticism is appreciated.AnOven’s Serenade: A SonnetArt can hide in places strange- inplacesWhere it seems irrelevant. ButsometimesCookies, crust, and candied apples-bakingThat is to say, becomes an artrefined.Sugar, eggs, and butter mix togetherInto batter, dough, something topourInto the oven, heat, and always knowthatWhat you are doing is quite lovedand moreFor baking takes a certain kind ofsomeoneIt takes a type of what-'je ne sais quoi' Since baking is a science (youshould know this)A person needs to hammer out theflawsWhile seeming unimportant in themomentAnd not as powerful as ice or lightOr any of the others, you shouldknow thatIngredients always put up a fightWhile baking isn’t revolutionaryWe can say that to pixies, it bringsjoyThough it can’t bring the changingof the seasonsFor morale it may then be employed.
Great job! I love how you take an artistic look at seemingly random ingredients that come together magically. Sonnets can be tricky, so I also admire how you work longer words and phrases like 'irrelevant' and 'je ne sais quoi' into the verses. And I think the lines "And not as powerful as ice or light" and "For baking takes a certain kind of someone" are perfectly metered.
If you want to get technical, most sonnets have only 14 lines and more particular rhyme schemes. One common rhyming pattern is ABAB CDCD EFEF GG. Maybe something to try for your next poem--but your blank verse here seems off to a decent start. I love it.
When copy-pasting things into the forum, it tends to stick some words together, just letting you know. I had to edit my 4,000 word writing contest entry for that. {:5_105:} Great poem!!!!
Lovely sonnet! I like the rhyming scheme of this :) You did art mixing culinary with poetry. Cool!
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